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Revision as of 14:00, 21 March 2019
Really nice start. Your writing is clear. I would, however, like to see a clear section about the Ethics of the issue framed clearly by course concepts. It could be made more clear to the reader what the ethical concerns are, and what ties these ethical concerns together. I think grounding this more in course material could help provide a framework for the reader to use to think about your topic.
Elizabeth Whittaker
Drew
Good research and start on your writing. There's a lot of good information here, but needs to be in your own words. Try to summarize or paraphrase in order to relate your findings back to the topic. Additionally, look at other featured wikipedia articles to see how they structure their writing and try to adapt your first-person tone into a more neutral stance with supporting evidence.
