Talk:Utilitarian Philosophy

Really nice start. Your writing is clear. I would, however, like to see a clear section about the Ethics of the issue framed clearly by course concepts. It could be made more clear to the reader what the ethical concerns are, and what ties these ethical concerns together. I think grounding this more in course material could help provide a framework for the reader to use to think about your topic.

Elizabeth Whittaker

Drew

Good research and start on your writing. There's a lot of good information here, but needs to be in your own words. Try to summarize or paraphrase in order to relate your findings back to the topic. Additionally, look at other featured wikipedia articles to see how they structure their writing and try to adapt your first-person tone into a more neutral stance with supporting evidence.

Carolyn

A paragraph from this article on perfect vandalism was copied directly from the Jeremy Bentham article, which I helped edit and was pasted here.