Talk:Jing Guo
Jing, I really enjoyed reading your reflection. I thought the introduction was a nice touch, and did a good job of giving a historical and current understanding of the term avatar. It then connected back to how those examples related to your evolver avatar. I also thought your personal reflection was well done. It was definitely your main piece as seen by the length of the section, the time you spent creating your personal avatar, and the struggles you mentioned that you confronted when adjusting your physical features. You gave many good contextual examples to help me understand exactly what you were thinking at the different stages creating your avatar. I thought the child hood example, of how you liked to play dress up was fitting. I also felt you did a good job of describing the challenges of being Asian in America, and how that related towards creating an accurate looking avatar. Because the meat of your reflection was based on your personal avatar, I felt the brevity of your fantasy avatar description was ok. With your goal being to make a fun character, I thought it was cool how you tried to imitate Jesse Williams, and liked how you added some of your own features. You didn’t seem to really relate your avatar to one pop culture theme, but I did like how a few references were sprinkled throughout with mentions of Hinduism, Avatar, and Jesse Williams. I also thought your personal experiences mentioned did a fine job of explaining what a stronger pop culture reference would have said and so didn’t mind. Overall I the reflection was really good.
Hi Jing,
Great job on your reflection assignment. I felt your introduction was a great way to start off the reflective process because it refreshes what an avatar is to the reader and explains which definition your are using in your reflection. Next I like the way you organized the process of your construction of each of your avatars. This shows that you had a clear understanding of the assignment and executed it well as from a readers perspective it is very clear to me how you created your avatar. In addition, I thought you described the problems you faced well and I found it informative and interesting that you included possible reasons why very limited Asian faces existed in the program. Furthermore, since you related it to situations in the real world by referencing the limited "make up" tools available I felt it was a good example which proves your point about Asians being minorities in the US. Similarly I felt your detailed analysis and explanation of how you created your fantasy was on mark ans again shows that understood the assignment. However, while you did include some outside sources which you used as inspiration on how to create your avatar, I was left wanting to read more about how your choice of Jessie Williams could further explain the racial and cultural issues; as that is the main point of your reflection earlier in the paper. Overall I felt that while you explained how you created your avatar really well and the difficulties you faced, your outside sources do not exactly refer racial and cultural issues and you could have used your outside example better with in in depth analysis. Still you did great job on your reflection it was very reflective and informative and fun and easy to read. Excellent work!
-- Dorothy Bridges
