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I wanted to let you know that it was a pleasure reading your autobiography! I even liked how you were unique with the title. A lot of people had their names, but you took it a step further in added user: Chalse Okorom, which is pretty creative considering we are talking about online identities. I also liked that you brung in many of the readings that we discussed in class and tied them into your writing. | I wanted to let you know that it was a pleasure reading your autobiography! I even liked how you were unique with the title. A lot of people had their names, but you took it a step further in added user: Chalse Okorom, which is pretty creative considering we are talking about online identities. I also liked that you brung in many of the readings that we discussed in class and tied them into your writing. | ||
| − | This is an excellent draft, but I did have a suggestion going forward with your revision. I know you talked a lot about how you don't really post and most of the pictures do not even include a picture of yourself, it's mostly group stuff like you talked about. However, it would of been nice to maybe add your profile picture from Facebook or maybe even a post you posted because it will give the reader a feel for who you really are and what we can learn from what you post. I hope that helps! Good luck and keep up the great work! | + | This is an excellent draft, but I did have a suggestion going forward with your revision. I know you talked a lot about how you don't really post and most of the pictures do not even include a picture of yourself, it's mostly group stuff like you talked about. However, it would of been nice to maybe add your profile picture from Facebook or maybe even a post you posted(even if it wasn't recent) because it will give the reader a feel for who you really are and what we can learn from what you post. I hope that helps! Good luck and keep up the great work! |
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I wanted to let you know that it was a pleasure reading your autobiography! I even liked how you were unique with the title. A lot of people had their names, but you took it a step further in added user: Chalse Okorom, which is pretty creative considering we are talking about online identities. I also liked that you brung in many of the readings that we discussed in class and tied them into your writing.
This is an excellent draft, but I did have a suggestion going forward with your revision. I know you talked a lot about how you don't really post and most of the pictures do not even include a picture of yourself, it's mostly group stuff like you talked about. However, it would of been nice to maybe add your profile picture from Facebook or maybe even a post you posted(even if it wasn't recent) because it will give the reader a feel for who you really are and what we can learn from what you post. I hope that helps! Good luck and keep up the great work!
Malaysha D. White -----
