User talk:Chalse Okorom
Chalse--
I wanted to let you know that it was a pleasure reading your autobiography! I even liked how you were unique with the title. A lot of people had their names, but you took it a step further in added user: Chalse Okorom, which is pretty creative considering we are talking about online identities. I also liked that you brung in many of the readings that we discussed in class and tied them into your writing. Your writing was easy to follow and can get a grasp of who you are.
This is an excellent draft, but I did have a suggestion going forward with your revision. I know you talked a lot about how you don't really post and most of the pictures do not even include a picture of yourself, it's mostly group stuff like you talked about. However, it would of been nice to maybe add your profile picture from Facebook or maybe even a post you posted(even if it wasn't recent) because it will give the reader a feel for who you really are and what we can learn from what you post. I hope that helps! Good luck and keep up the great work!
Khyatee
Hey Chalse, I really liked reading your online identity piece. It was refreshing and relatable to read about your love for niche facebook groups! I also enjoyed how you chose to focus on one social media platform so that you were able to get pretty detailed with it. My only real suggestion for you is to try and elaborate on the line, "how could I use social media, if its main features are exactly what I dislike about it?" You touched on this idea briefly at the beginning and end of your piece, but I think discussing this topic a bit more can convey a lot about you as a person and your online identity in general. I think that the sections on facebook groups could also be a little more catered to you as a person - perhaps how they describe your identity and how you choose to express yourself online. Overall, really interesting read though! Nice job!
Malaysha D. White -----
Corina
Great job, Chalse!
Nice flow and good insights into your online identity and the course's readings.
Your colleagues’ comments above are spot on.
Please consider them fully for your revision.
Best,
Corina
