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Hello, I really enjoyed reading your article about your social identity on Spotify. Your first sentence was a great hook and your introduction helps introduce the reader to what your article will be focusing on. However, it would be really interesting if you could go more in depth about what your playlists (such as TLV or run) show about you, your personality, and your experiences because you just very briefly went over that. Also, it would be interesting to go into what the reader wouldn't know about you from your online identity. Furthermore, I think your conclusion should overview more about what we learned (or didn't learn) about your online identity and less on explaining Spotify functions. Other than that, I thought your writing style was appropriate and your images helped to create a picture of what you were discussing. Overall, great work! --Rachel Sartori | Hello, I really enjoyed reading your article about your social identity on Spotify. Your first sentence was a great hook and your introduction helps introduce the reader to what your article will be focusing on. However, it would be really interesting if you could go more in depth about what your playlists (such as TLV or run) show about you, your personality, and your experiences because you just very briefly went over that. Also, it would be interesting to go into what the reader wouldn't know about you from your online identity. Furthermore, I think your conclusion should overview more about what we learned (or didn't learn) about your online identity and less on explaining Spotify functions. Other than that, I thought your writing style was appropriate and your images helped to create a picture of what you were discussing. Overall, great work! --Rachel Sartori | ||
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Revision as of 01:33, 22 February 2018
Hello, I really enjoyed reading your article about your social identity on Spotify. Your first sentence was a great hook and your introduction helps introduce the reader to what your article will be focusing on. However, it would be really interesting if you could go more in depth about what your playlists (such as TLV or run) show about you, your personality, and your experiences because you just very briefly went over that. Also, it would be interesting to go into what the reader wouldn't know about you from your online identity. Furthermore, I think your conclusion should overview more about what we learned (or didn't learn) about your online identity and less on explaining Spotify functions. Other than that, I thought your writing style was appropriate and your images helped to create a picture of what you were discussing. Overall, great work! --Rachel Sartori
Hi Bari, my comments are coming soon! --Andy Bui
