Talk:Screen time's effect on adolescents mental health

Length

The rough draft version of this article only contains around 1600 words. Fortunately, the author has many sections where she can add to the required word count.

Structure

The author does a fantastic job with the opening paragraph, where the issue is nicely described and summarized. The use of citations from other sources are abundant in the opening paragraph, which offers a sense of integrity to the article already. The author uses several different references to lay out what the article will be about, and quickly states the main idea that they will address from each of those references. However, I would suggest leaving out some parts of the first paragraph that offers the conclusions of the issues at hand, or else there would be no reason to keep on reading.

The body of the article has many different sections already outlined. Not all the sections have been completed with text, but the general message of what the author is trying to convey is clear. The sections are organized in a very comprehensive format, where it dives into the physical health and psychological symptoms (and all components in between) regarding the effect of screen time on adolescents’ mental health. One thing I would suggest is maybe combining some sections together. For example, I believe moderation could be put under regulation as it relates to one another. I believe that would help make it a more coherent article.

The author has many different references that they utilize within their article. This is a great thing since it builds the article’s credibility. Almost every paragraph so far has a reference embedded in somewhere, so it shows readers that everything is backed up by other sources. One thing that stands out is the reference from "Type Of Screen Time Moderates Effects On Outcomes In 4013 Children: Evidence From The Longitudinal Study Of Australian Children". Unless this specific reference has very unique ideas that is being referenced, it would be a good idea to get other articles that could be used as reference for the same message.

Clarity

The issue at stake that the author is writing the article about is very clear to me. They are exploring the effects of screen time in correlation to mental health of adolescents. The author does a good job at describing how the World Health Organization defines “mental health” and uses that definition as a pillar to compare the effects of screen time against. This is an ethical issue that is of utmost importance because as technology continually evolves, it will become more and more of our daily lives. It is imperative that we understand how moving forward in such a direction will affect the next generation. Understanding how screen time effects the mental health of adolescents will help us create countermeasures to mitigate the negative effects overall.

Objective reporting (Neutral point of view)

Overall, the articles report on the screen time’s effect on adolescents’ mental health objectively. The author doesn’t blatantly provide their own opinions anywhere in the article. The perspective of different stakeholders is also addressed in some of the sections. For example, in the “Regulation” section, there are subsections for parents and medical care providers where their responses and responsibilities are explained. There can definitely be more stakeholders in other sections, and I encourage the author to add them to give the reader a bigger picture of the issue. Nearly all the statements made in this article so far have been backed up by solid references. However, sometimes the author uses adjective and specific wording that nudges the reader to think a certain way. I would advise the author to be wary of that.