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First of all, I'd like to say fantastic job on your digital avatar! I thought the progression of your Facebook persona on this MediaWiki page gave me a lot of insight about your behavior in the digital space. Some things that I enjoyed about your article were: the use of cringe-worthy pictures, the overall tone/voice of the piece, and the openness of your piece. The pictures you used were obviously taken from a while back and I thought that the photos you chose really elevated the writing you did. I particularly enjoyed the last photo in your piece about the ups and downs of life. Big fan of dark humor. Your tone and voice of the piece were very casual and very easy for me to read, which is something I appreciated. Oftentimes wiki articles/pieces are very dense and difficult to read but that was not the case with your avatar. Lastly, I also appreciate the genuineness of your piece, how open you were about your persona and the language you used in your writing definitely sounded genuine when reading. | First of all, I'd like to say fantastic job on your digital avatar! I thought the progression of your Facebook persona on this MediaWiki page gave me a lot of insight about your behavior in the digital space. Some things that I enjoyed about your article were: the use of cringe-worthy pictures, the overall tone/voice of the piece, and the openness of your piece. The pictures you used were obviously taken from a while back and I thought that the photos you chose really elevated the writing you did. I particularly enjoyed the last photo in your piece about the ups and downs of life. Big fan of dark humor. Your tone and voice of the piece were very casual and very easy for me to read, which is something I appreciated. Oftentimes wiki articles/pieces are very dense and difficult to read but that was not the case with your avatar. Lastly, I also appreciate the genuineness of your piece, how open you were about your persona and the language you used in your writing definitely sounded genuine when reading. | ||
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There were some things that I would like to note in your piece that could be improved. Something I wished I could've seen more is more pictures and illustrations. I thought your piece was well written, however, it was hard to tell how your Facebook helped you come out of your shell, as you mentioned in the article, without seeing visible changes on your Facebook feed and profile. Another thing that I thought you could have fleshed out more is the MapMyRun section of your piece. It felt a little out of place and short, I think it is not extremely essential to your piece so if you wanted to take it out, I feel it wouldn't take away much from the main flow of your avatar. | There were some things that I would like to note in your piece that could be improved. Something I wished I could've seen more is more pictures and illustrations. I thought your piece was well written, however, it was hard to tell how your Facebook helped you come out of your shell, as you mentioned in the article, without seeing visible changes on your Facebook feed and profile. Another thing that I thought you could have fleshed out more is the MapMyRun section of your piece. It felt a little out of place and short, I think it is not extremely essential to your piece so if you wanted to take it out, I feel it wouldn't take away much from the main flow of your avatar. | ||
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Overall, again, amazing job! | Overall, again, amazing job! | ||
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Best, | Best, | ||
Bryant | Bryant | ||
Revision as of 21:04, 30 March 2017
Hi Ori,
First of all, I'd like to say fantastic job on your digital avatar! I thought the progression of your Facebook persona on this MediaWiki page gave me a lot of insight about your behavior in the digital space. Some things that I enjoyed about your article were: the use of cringe-worthy pictures, the overall tone/voice of the piece, and the openness of your piece. The pictures you used were obviously taken from a while back and I thought that the photos you chose really elevated the writing you did. I particularly enjoyed the last photo in your piece about the ups and downs of life. Big fan of dark humor. Your tone and voice of the piece were very casual and very easy for me to read, which is something I appreciated. Oftentimes wiki articles/pieces are very dense and difficult to read but that was not the case with your avatar. Lastly, I also appreciate the genuineness of your piece, how open you were about your persona and the language you used in your writing definitely sounded genuine when reading.
There were some things that I would like to note in your piece that could be improved. Something I wished I could've seen more is more pictures and illustrations. I thought your piece was well written, however, it was hard to tell how your Facebook helped you come out of your shell, as you mentioned in the article, without seeing visible changes on your Facebook feed and profile. Another thing that I thought you could have fleshed out more is the MapMyRun section of your piece. It felt a little out of place and short, I think it is not extremely essential to your piece so if you wanted to take it out, I feel it wouldn't take away much from the main flow of your avatar.
Overall, again, amazing job!
Best,
Bryant
