Talk:Ori Lindner

Hi Ori,

First of all, I'd like to say fantastic job on your digital avatar! I thought the progression of your Facebook persona on this MediaWiki page gave me a lot of insight about your behavior in the digital space. Some things that I enjoyed about your article were: the use of cringe-worthy pictures, the overall tone/voice of the piece, and the openness of your piece. The pictures you used were obviously taken from a while back and I thought that the photos you chose really elevated the writing you did. I particularly enjoyed the last photo in your piece about the ups and downs of life. Big fan of dark humor. Your tone and voice of the piece were very casual and very easy for me to read, which is something I appreciated. Oftentimes wiki articles/pieces are very dense and difficult to read but that was not the case with your avatar. Lastly, I also appreciate the genuineness of your piece, how open you were about your persona and the language you used in your writing definitely sounded genuine when reading.

There were some things that I would like to note in your piece that could be improved. Something I wished I could've seen more is more pictures and illustrations. I thought your piece was well written, however, it was hard to tell how your Facebook helped you come out of your shell, as you mentioned in the article, without seeing visible changes on your Facebook feed and profile. Another thing that I thought you could have fleshed out more is the MapMyRun section of your piece. It felt a little out of place and short, I think it is not extremely essential to your piece so if you wanted to take it out, I feel it wouldn't take away much from the main flow of your avatar.

Overall, again, amazing job!

Best, Bryant

Mira's Commentary

Hi Ori,

I like the honesty in your wiki post and how that reflects how you use Facebook to portray yourself online. You developed this really well when you weighed the pros and cons of cultivating such an honest online presence in your section on whether to nuke all of the information for the sake of recruiting and presenting yourself as employable or for the sake of "being weird and proud".

You used the theme of memories really well by painting a picture of a younger self and the associated jokes/awkward photos of that time. However, you could focus more on why it is that you changed the way you post to Facebook if you finished your post with a quote from Floridi describing how people are meant to have embarrassing photos on Facebook be made socially acceptable. Could it be that despite your wanting to portray yourself as humorous on Facebook that it doesn't match up with how most people are using the social media website today? Or that you changed along with the "social norms" to match what you posted to "what the people want"?

Overall, good reflective piece and tying in the themes from the class!

Cheers, Mira

Ritam's Commentary

Hi Ori,

I want to start by saying I really really enjoyed this piece. I found it to be candid and refreshing. You also have an excellent sense of comic timing and a funny voice, and it makes your writing a lot more enjoyable. One tactic that serves to make wiki posts a lot more readable is constant line breaks, and you always found good places to make them.

I especially enjoyed your writing on how Facebook and social media has allowed you develop yourself socially. A lot of these avatar pieces are too heavily focused on the negatives of interaction online and it's nice to see someone that really benefited from it. I thought it was really honest how you described your process of figuring out what people liked. I do think that I would have liked to see some examples of the change!

I also really liked your two arguments at the bottom. It felt very blog-posty to introduce competing theories. If I had to pick something to change, I would say that your section on MapMyRun is kind of unnecessary and doesn't flow as well.

Best, Ritam