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After reading your online data identity, I was very impressed with the focus you had on actually writing about your online identity. None of the paragraphs were irrelevant to the theme you wanted to get across to your readers. From what I gather, your overarching theme for your data identity is: Caution on the internet. This theme is interwoven into all the different things you discuss and you introduce it very well in your introduction and continue to add upon it using the google searches as well as data broker sites to further talk about why you stay cautious on the internet. However, an area of improvement I would like to suggest is to your Data Broker Profile Section of your identity statement. You talk about how shocked at how much and how little information the data broker site found out about you, but why are you shocked at how little information they found out about you? Wouldn’t you want this to be the case since you have been cautious and selective in the online accounts you create and sites you visit? Seems to me the data broker site has been able to find enough information about you given your cautiousness, even though the data was somewhat incorrect. Maybe incorporate this idea into your statement as well: “even though you were cautious your data was still able to be found online. How ethical is that?” Also, talk about patterns that emerged in your searches. Did multiple data broker sites have your information listed incorrectly or was it just the one that professor Conway used. There are numerous free data broker websites online (try Checkmate or BeenVerified), does the information on these sites have any or incorrect information about you? Overall, your statement is very interesting to read and your voice shows in your writing whether it be your captions or the way you phrase things in your writing. You just need to add some points about the ethicality of information found online and some more deep insight in your conclusion and you should be good to go. | After reading your online data identity, I was very impressed with the focus you had on actually writing about your online identity. None of the paragraphs were irrelevant to the theme you wanted to get across to your readers. From what I gather, your overarching theme for your data identity is: Caution on the internet. This theme is interwoven into all the different things you discuss and you introduce it very well in your introduction and continue to add upon it using the google searches as well as data broker sites to further talk about why you stay cautious on the internet. However, an area of improvement I would like to suggest is to your Data Broker Profile Section of your identity statement. You talk about how shocked at how much and how little information the data broker site found out about you, but why are you shocked at how little information they found out about you? Wouldn’t you want this to be the case since you have been cautious and selective in the online accounts you create and sites you visit? Seems to me the data broker site has been able to find enough information about you given your cautiousness, even though the data was somewhat incorrect. Maybe incorporate this idea into your statement as well: “even though you were cautious your data was still able to be found online. How ethical is that?” Also, talk about patterns that emerged in your searches. Did multiple data broker sites have your information listed incorrectly or was it just the one that professor Conway used. There are numerous free data broker websites online (try Checkmate or BeenVerified), does the information on these sites have any or incorrect information about you? Overall, your statement is very interesting to read and your voice shows in your writing whether it be your captions or the way you phrase things in your writing. You just need to add some points about the ethicality of information found online and some more deep insight in your conclusion and you should be good to go. | ||
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It would be a great idea to tie your post back to one of the readings and argue on an idea like the benefits of not being on social media. Data Brokers still managed to get certain information on you and maybe you could talk about how you were so cautious and still data brokers managed to get data on it. So, is it even possible to stay hidden online? | It would be a great idea to tie your post back to one of the readings and argue on an idea like the benefits of not being on social media. Data Brokers still managed to get certain information on you and maybe you could talk about how you were so cautious and still data brokers managed to get data on it. So, is it even possible to stay hidden online? | ||
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| + | I found your identity statement pretty interesting in part because the tone you use while writing is really easy to follow and in part because your experience with data brokers is so similar to my own. Like yours, mine didn't return any social media accounts, but it did return my address and some information on a couple of my neighbors. | ||
| + | Some points I noted that could help improve the quality of your statement even further are: In the introduction, you state that the TED talk has made you rethink the way you use the internet, and I see that you elaborate further on that in the next section. You might want to bring that elaboration back to the introduction rather than referencing it in the My Online Identity section. Other than that the only thing I noticed was that the "introduction" isn't capitalized, so just a minor thing. | ||
| + | All in all, you followed the rubric, the formatting you used flows well and looks nice, and the images you used are engaging and relevant. Great job! | ||
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Latest revision as of 00:11, 27 February 2020
Pratik Goswami Comments:
After reading your online data identity, I was very impressed with the focus you had on actually writing about your online identity. None of the paragraphs were irrelevant to the theme you wanted to get across to your readers. From what I gather, your overarching theme for your data identity is: Caution on the internet. This theme is interwoven into all the different things you discuss and you introduce it very well in your introduction and continue to add upon it using the google searches as well as data broker sites to further talk about why you stay cautious on the internet. However, an area of improvement I would like to suggest is to your Data Broker Profile Section of your identity statement. You talk about how shocked at how much and how little information the data broker site found out about you, but why are you shocked at how little information they found out about you? Wouldn’t you want this to be the case since you have been cautious and selective in the online accounts you create and sites you visit? Seems to me the data broker site has been able to find enough information about you given your cautiousness, even though the data was somewhat incorrect. Maybe incorporate this idea into your statement as well: “even though you were cautious your data was still able to be found online. How ethical is that?” Also, talk about patterns that emerged in your searches. Did multiple data broker sites have your information listed incorrectly or was it just the one that professor Conway used. There are numerous free data broker websites online (try Checkmate or BeenVerified), does the information on these sites have any or incorrect information about you? Overall, your statement is very interesting to read and your voice shows in your writing whether it be your captions or the way you phrase things in your writing. You just need to add some points about the ethicality of information found online and some more deep insight in your conclusion and you should be good to go.
Keshav Gupta comments:
Hi Nate, I really liked the way you structured your post. I really liked how you covered your activeness on the internet in depth and then analyzed what data brokers and google have on you. I really enjoyed your conversational tone throughout the reading, and it made it easy to engage and also fun to read. I really liked how you focused on your real online identity and how that’s been working so far.
You spoke about how safe you were by not having accounts on these social websites and I feel you could include what you felt you were missing out on and how the advantages of not having an account outweighed the advantages of being on social media.
It would be a great idea to tie your post back to one of the readings and argue on an idea like the benefits of not being on social media. Data Brokers still managed to get certain information on you and maybe you could talk about how you were so cautious and still data brokers managed to get data on it. So, is it even possible to stay hidden online?
Hey Nate,
I found your identity statement pretty interesting in part because the tone you use while writing is really easy to follow and in part because your experience with data brokers is so similar to my own. Like yours, mine didn't return any social media accounts, but it did return my address and some information on a couple of my neighbors. Some points I noted that could help improve the quality of your statement even further are: In the introduction, you state that the TED talk has made you rethink the way you use the internet, and I see that you elaborate further on that in the next section. You might want to bring that elaboration back to the introduction rather than referencing it in the My Online Identity section. Other than that the only thing I noticed was that the "introduction" isn't capitalized, so just a minor thing. All in all, you followed the rubric, the formatting you used flows well and looks nice, and the images you used are engaging and relevant. Great job!
- Isaiah Gesinski
