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| − | Great job Molly! I think a great strength of your identity statement is that your voice can really be heard through your writing. I really appreciate how you broke down your sections. This made it very clear how your research process went. I think it is interesting how you detail the specifics of your findings and work your way to the abstract and more general conclusions that you | + | Great job Molly! I think a great strength of your identity statement is that your voice can really be heard through your writing. I really appreciate how you broke down your sections. This made it very clear how your research process went. I think it is interesting how you detail the specifics of your findings and work your way to the abstract and more general conclusions that you came up with. This is a great method for writing about your research. I would suggest concluding each section because this would allow for better transitions. I would like to hear more about not only how you feel about your Google search and the data brokers, but how you think this is problematic and how you think data brokers are accessing this information. I think you could also reference the Haimson reading in your last section. You address some very good ideas about how Facebook conflicts with time and the authenticity of your persona is not depicted correctly. I would like to know more about your authenticity in other parts of your research - Google, data brokers, etc. and consider connected it to Haimson's ideas. Overall, wonderful work! |
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Comments by Emma Huez
Great job Molly! I think a great strength of your identity statement is that your voice can really be heard through your writing. I really appreciate how you broke down your sections. This made it very clear how your research process went. I think it is interesting how you detail the specifics of your findings and work your way to the abstract and more general conclusions that you came up with. This is a great method for writing about your research. I would suggest concluding each section because this would allow for better transitions. I would like to hear more about not only how you feel about your Google search and the data brokers, but how you think this is problematic and how you think data brokers are accessing this information. I think you could also reference the Haimson reading in your last section. You address some very good ideas about how Facebook conflicts with time and the authenticity of your persona is not depicted correctly. I would like to know more about your authenticity in other parts of your research - Google, data brokers, etc. and consider connected it to Haimson's ideas. Overall, wonderful work!
