Talk:Molly Bis

Comments by Emma Huez

Great job Molly! I think a great strength of your identity statement is that your voice can really be heard through your writing. I really appreciate how you broke down your sections. This made it very clear how your research process went. I think it is interesting how you detail the specifics of your findings and work your way to the abstract and more general conclusions that you came up with. This is a great method for writing about your research. I would suggest concluding each section because this would allow for better transitions. I would like to hear more about not only how you feel about your Google search and the data brokers, but how you think this is problematic and how you think data brokers are accessing this information. I think you could also reference the Haimson reading in your last section. You address some very good ideas about how Facebook conflicts with time and the authenticity of your persona is not depicted correctly. I would like to know more about your authenticity in other parts of your research - Google, data brokers, etc. and consider connecting it to Haimson's ideas. Overall, wonderful work!

Jessica Carlin's Comments

Hi Molly! Overall, very nice job with this post!

The beginning paragraph/intro was well said and the thesis introducing your analysis was concise and informative. It was filled with professional language and good insight. I liked how you used the curated data broker sight, though you could delve deeper into your analysis and feelings toward what this information disclosed. The fact that the last time you were seen at your home is very alarming and it would be interesting to investigate how this data was collected so that you can attempt to avoid giving away this information about yourself. You did a lot of good research, just if you wanted to go beyond and possibly salvage some of your personal privacy further.

I also liked how you took your research a step further and downloaded data from Facebook about your online data profile that they have collected over the years. Though all the Facebook data isn't up-to-date and accurate, it once did pertain to your identity, and this research really shows that any information you put on the internet is permanent and can be traced to you years down the road. You could possibly analyze more on this information on how it wasn't harmful information that was saved on you, simply out-dated but how could your feelings on this aspect of Facebook change if it were things about yourself you no longer wish to share with the world?

Nice connection to Floridi, I think you could include more relevant course topics and readings within this post because you touch on a lot of different aspects of information ethics. I also could not find your images, so maybe retry embedding them, because this would be useful information and draw reader's attention.