Talk:Meera Desai

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Hi Meera,

Your introduction was a great way to hook in the reader, and I enjoyed the image you painted of your Facebook account. I think you did a good job of explaining how your early Facebook usage was a more or less accurate reflection of yourself, and then transitioning into what your Facebook account has become today and how it has affected how much you portray about yourself. I would have liked to learn more about how your struggles to control your Facebook audience and the persona you painted online clashed with who you are wholly in real life. There are a few spelling and grammatical errors in your writing, so I suggest you do a thorough combing of your content. You have a solid chronological flow of your Facebook history, and I enjoyed reading your perspective and reasons for your transitional Facebook usage. The layout and style of the page is beautiful; you did a fantastic job and I enjoyed reading this!

Sincerely,
George Lu

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