Talk:Kavya Pratapa

Hi Kavya,

Overall, it was a good read with good organization and picture usage.

Your hook was good as deciding to shorten your name to Kavya has more consequences than just easier to pronounce for people. I would delete "In the rest of this essay" because it feels too clunky and I feel you could tie in that sentence better with the above paragraph.

It might be better to make subsections for your "Google Identity" for the differing results you get with your shortened and full name. "Self via Google" was a good way to close the section and to connect to Floridi, but it felt a bit wordy.

I don't think you need to talk about Instant Checkmate's reporting of sex offenders to discuss who you are because they don't have anything to do with you. Change the title of "My online self" to what you bolded in the paragraph. Simplify the text before that question to bring up Haimson and Hoffman sooner.

Spheres of Identity was an excellent conversation to close your essay with. The sphere concept fits really well as none of us are really aware of how much we live our lives in spheres that may or may not be readily visible to us. I would rework the sentence "Our close friends.." or remove it because I feel you've already covered the concept in the previous paragraph.

Best,

Tim Michowski