Talk:Joshua Walker

Starting with the overall flow of the paper, I thought that you did a great job with structuring the piece in a chronological format. I think this style of formatting really helps with following your journey on Facebook over the past decade or so. More importantly, you made sure to express how your online identity was altered with each passing year and stage in your life. It was easy to see the differences from when you first joined to where you are today.

However I think there are a few sections such as “Read my Texts” “The Early Days,” where you could probably go more in depth on how your online identity either differed or was the same as your real life identity. While you went into specifics on how you used Facebook during these periods, the analysis on your actual identity could be expanded upon. The conclusion is also another great spot to add this analysis. Here you could make several points on how your identity now is either mirrored by Facebook or you have slowly changed your Facebook persona over the years comparatively to your offline beliefs and personality.

I also noticed at the end of “The Early Days” you may have missed a sentence right at the end as the last word is “regardless.” Just wanted to point it out in case you simply forgot to copy and paste that part in.

Overall I think you have a great base to work off of. You effectively used personal anecdotes and stories to allow us to look into your personal usage of Facebook, but if you added more analysis on your online identity and tied that into the readings for this class it could take this piece to the next level.

-Julien Childress