Difference between revisions of "Talk:Jason Rho"
| Line 4: | Line 4: | ||
I think your “About Me” section could have been a little more in depth for example; I would have liked to see more information about why you haven’t updated your content in a while and more about how you think others will use this section to judge you. I don’t think that it was necessary to write about advertisements on Facebook because other people don’t see the ads that are catered to you, therefore, they can’t really identify you based off of this but I can see how it could be a way you personally identify yourself. I wish your “Further Analysis” section could also have been slightly longer. The fact that you don’t think Facebook has any major restrictions is very interesting because most people feel that it is restricting, so I think you could have discussed this a little more. | I think your “About Me” section could have been a little more in depth for example; I would have liked to see more information about why you haven’t updated your content in a while and more about how you think others will use this section to judge you. I don’t think that it was necessary to write about advertisements on Facebook because other people don’t see the ads that are catered to you, therefore, they can’t really identify you based off of this but I can see how it could be a way you personally identify yourself. I wish your “Further Analysis” section could also have been slightly longer. The fact that you don’t think Facebook has any major restrictions is very interesting because most people feel that it is restricting, so I think you could have discussed this a little more. | ||
-Alissa | -Alissa | ||
| + | |||
| + | |||
| + | '''2nd Review''' | ||
| + | Jason, I found your article to definitely give me a better sense of how you want to be seen online by others. I found your music section to be very telling about what kind of music you like and how it relates to the identity you portray. I also have a music section and I definitely agree that music is a big indicator of what type of persona someone gives off online. I also enjoyed the pictures you chose to incorporate into your article. Having Tommy Wiseau as a "like" and having a picture with Wilfred in your photo is hilarious and adds to the comedic side of your personality that you were discussing. | ||
| + | |||
| + | I would have liked to see more information about how you feel your online identity differs from your "personal identity" in the Further Analysis section as well as how you believe the online identity will change once you have a job. I would have also liked to see more analysis in your About Me section. Overall, the quality of the writing is great. I was able to get a clear idea of what your online avatar says about you and I did not see any errors in your writing. | ||
| + | Good job! | ||
| + | -Daniel | ||
Revision as of 01:26, 21 November 2012
After reading about your avatar, I found that I definitely did get a better sense of who you are and how you want to be portrayed online. I liked how honest you were when talking about how you choose your profile picture because I feel like many guys will not admit to choosing a picture they consider a decent looking picture of themselves and that they think about what others will think about them. I liked how you had a whole section to talk about music because it is obviously something that it very important to you and is a strong identifier of who you are in real life.
Some suggestions: I think your “About Me” section could have been a little more in depth for example; I would have liked to see more information about why you haven’t updated your content in a while and more about how you think others will use this section to judge you. I don’t think that it was necessary to write about advertisements on Facebook because other people don’t see the ads that are catered to you, therefore, they can’t really identify you based off of this but I can see how it could be a way you personally identify yourself. I wish your “Further Analysis” section could also have been slightly longer. The fact that you don’t think Facebook has any major restrictions is very interesting because most people feel that it is restricting, so I think you could have discussed this a little more. -Alissa
2nd Review
Jason, I found your article to definitely give me a better sense of how you want to be seen online by others. I found your music section to be very telling about what kind of music you like and how it relates to the identity you portray. I also have a music section and I definitely agree that music is a big indicator of what type of persona someone gives off online. I also enjoyed the pictures you chose to incorporate into your article. Having Tommy Wiseau as a "like" and having a picture with Wilfred in your photo is hilarious and adds to the comedic side of your personality that you were discussing.
I would have liked to see more information about how you feel your online identity differs from your "personal identity" in the Further Analysis section as well as how you believe the online identity will change once you have a job. I would have also liked to see more analysis in your About Me section. Overall, the quality of the writing is great. I was able to get a clear idea of what your online avatar says about you and I did not see any errors in your writing. Good job! -Daniel
