Talk:Jason Rho
After reading about your avatar, I found that I definitely did get a better sense of who you are and how you want to be portrayed online. I liked how honest you were when talking about how you choose your profile picture because I feel like many guys will not admit to choosing a picture they consider a decent looking picture of themselves and that they think about what others will think about them. I liked how you had a whole section to talk about music because it is obviously something that it very important to you and is a strong identifier of who you are in real life.
Some suggestions: I think your “About Me” section could have been a little more in depth for example; I would have liked to see more information about why you haven’t updated your content in a while and more about how you think others will use this section to judge you. I don’t think that it was necessary to write about advertisements on Facebook because other people don’t see the ads that are catered to you, therefore, they can’t really identify you based off of this but I can see how it could be a way you personally identify yourself. I wish your “Further Analysis” section could also have been slightly longer. The fact that you don’t think Facebook has any major restrictions is very interesting because most people feel that it is restricting, so I think you could have discussed this a little more. -Alissa
2nd Review
Jason, I found your article to definitely give me a better sense of how you want to be seen online by others. I found your music section to be very telling about what kind of music you like and how it relates to the identity you portray. I also have a music section and I definitely agree that music is a big indicator of what type of persona someone gives off online. I also enjoyed the pictures you chose to incorporate into your article. Having Tommy Wiseau as a "like" and having a picture with Wilfred in your photo is hilarious and adds to the comedic side of your personality that you were discussing.
I would have liked to see more information about how you feel your online identity differs from your "personal identity" in the Further Analysis section as well as how you believe the online identity will change once you have a job. I would have also liked to see more analysis in your About Me section. Overall, the quality of the writing is great. I was able to get a clear idea of what your online avatar says about you and I did not see any errors in your writing. Good job! -Daniel
I really like the elements you chose for your Primary section of your page. I thought the three topics you picked were important, pictures and about me being the two first things you notice about someones pages, and a third to add some of your own uniqueness. In the "Pictures" section, your interpretation of your photo choices were genuine, in that you describe yourself to be laid back, but still conscious of your image, which compliments the style of your writing nicely. I thought in this section, you could have expanded a little bit more on the last sentence you wrote about a quick glance at your profile picture. What signals do you think these send? If you think users take away that you are a "musician", "hipster", or "nerdy", then does your profile already give a misleading notion to who you actually are?
It is really interesting to me of how laid back you are with pictures and your Anbout Me section, and how your mentality switches when you start talking about your "Music Identity". This was a really strong point in your post because I felt like this pararaph was the core in how Facebook portrays you and your identity. This is the part that you take the time to update, or even just pay attention to because it is the part that you care about most, and the part that describes you most.
The "Secondary Elements" part of your Facebook doesn't seem to be as crucial toconstructing your online identity as your About Me or Music section. However, I do like how you incorporated them into your page because whether or not you are conscious of it, these little parts of your Facebook still play a big role in shaping others' perceptions on your profile.
Finally, your "Further Analysis" section brought your post together nicely. It was a solid wrap up of all of the elements you had mentioned throughout. I thought your structure was neatly organized and easy to read, although it could have had better flow within the context of each paragraph. All of the paragraphs were great and talked about a lot of key points, and it would only strengthen your page to elaborate on some of these elements, such as your "Further Analysis" section. After reading your post, I have an outline of what kind of person you are and how viewers see your page. Overall, great page - I definitely enjoyed reading!
-Jenny Kim
I think it's true that your facebook is a fairly honest portrait of yourself and your humorous side. The elements of your profile that you control, including other users' ability to see the music you listen to demonstrate your interests and passions as they are in the physical world. I think it's interesting that you allow people to see what music you listen to because I consider that a very personal aspect of character and I tend not to want to share that information about myself on facebook. Also you lax mentality of controlling secondary elements of your facebook is true to your persona. It would be cool for you to talk more about what you don't include on facebook that might either be on other online sites or not online at all and why. I find your pictures hilarious and they definitely show a side of you that I know well as your friend and someone who interacts with you on a regular basis.
- Caryn Laska
