Talk:Jack Pakela

Jack, first off I noticed two minor grammar errors: In the introduction you need to add a "to" after create and before cyber-bodies, as well as "I these" should be "If these" in your last section.

You did a great job of comparing your "real-life" with your "digital-life" while waiting on more information from Professor Conway. However, I think you can go into further detail on this. If you still do not get more information from Professor Conway you can talk about what you speculate the data brokers have on you(if missed labeled for someone else) and if it is the you that you found during your google search.

You could add one or two more images about yourself to go along with the orchestra picture. Maybe have one of something that you found immediately upon starting your search and a picture that you have that is nowhere to be found during the search.

The "Data Analysis" section does a good job as a conclusion. You could consider taking one of the quotes you choose and go a little deeper into how it relates to you data profile or lack there of.

-Sean Getty