Revision as of 14:48, 25 February 2021

Hi JJ! I thought your reflection on your online identity was really thorough and engaging. Your analysis was really clear and I really liked the way you organized and broke up that section. I think the way you separated your information was very successful and made the structure of your writing super easy to read. If I could suggest one thing it would be to add a little bit of personal charm to your headers. Your writing has so much style and personality I just thought it would be nice if the headers matched that energy. Other than that great read and good luck on the revision, it should be super easy for you! - Taylor Kelly

Comments from Sam Rechner

Hi JJ,

Great job on this piece. I really enjoyed reading about how your digital footprint has developed. I thought your introduction was solid and presented your background information in a simple and anecdotal way. I also really appreciated the way you structured the statement. Transitions from paragraph to paragraph were very clean and the topic sentences made your discussion points more organized.