Talk:JJ Wright

Hi JJ! I thought your reflection on your online identity was really thorough and engaging. Your analysis was really clear and I really liked the way you organized and broke up that section. I think the way you separated your information was very successful and made the structure of your writing super easy to read. If I could suggest one thing it would be to add a little bit of personal charm to your headers. Your writing has so much style and personality I just thought it would be nice if the headers matched that energy. Other than that great read and good luck on the revision, it should be super easy for you! - Taylor Kelly

Comments from Sam Rechner

Hi JJ,

Great job on this piece. I really enjoyed reading about how your digital footprint has developed. I thought your introduction was solid and presented your background information in a simple and anecdotal way (creative name choice by your dad btw). I also really appreciated the way you structured the statement. Your photos were nice/information and well-placed. Transitions from paragraph to paragraph were very clean and the topic sentences made your discussion points more organized. Your point about the paradoxical nature of data privacy and the internet/social media really resonated with me as well. It's so difficult having to use technology in so many facets of our life while also understanding how little privacy we have while scrolling/searching. Your analysis section was also spot on. I liked how you got into the mind of big tech and described data privacy from their point of view. One suggestion I have would be to restructure/refine your data broker section. It is fascinating to see that the company had your parents information, but it does sort of distract the reader (at least me) from your other sections. Overall, I loved your piece though. Keep it up!!