Talk:Harrison Crandall

Hi Harrison,

This is a strong start. Your research and discussion of what information exists about you online is comprehensive. You begin to incorporate a little more of your opinion, like your fears about lack of anonymity online, and I think you could expand on this further to make your theme more clear. It's clear what someone could find about you if they looked you up online, but consider answering the question of: why should we care? You begin to express some concern about the ethical implications of this information existing, but your piece would be strengthened if you could dig a little deeper. What does all this existing information imply? Consider a discussion around the ethical implications of this and what you find morally acceptable/unacceptable. Nice work overall!

-Evon Yao

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Hi Harrison,

I completely agree with Evon, you've got a strong start and a nice blend of research, summary, and analysis of your online info. I also noted you're formatting looks very nice and the article as a whole hits all the points of the rubric. You discuss how the first actual image of you is one you chose deliberately so that you can control your identity online, perhaps you could expand on what that identity entails and how it might differ from the identity assigned to you by the data brokers. You could also use your crafter online identity to contrast with your offline identity and illustrate the differences therein. All in all I found it to be a good piece, good luck on surpassing Harrison R. Crandall!

-Isaiah Gesinski

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