Talk:Hanwenbo Yang

Peer Review 1:

I like the topic that you chose as your theme: the idea of your Facebook profile maturing as you age. I think this is something that happens to a lot of people, and it is interesting to see an actual transition process laid out in your piece. I also like that you talk about a variety of primary sources (profile pictures, about me, activity feed, likes), however I think it would be interesting to maybe talk about a few other things, such as: cover photo (since this is a relatively new addition to Facebook, has what you do with your cover photo changed at all?), secondary sources (do photos that others have uploaded/ways that others interact with you on Facebook also show more maturity in recent years, or is this something only your primary aspects show?). It's also good that you mention that as your Facebook has matured, it hasn't necessarily become more accurate - you just now are more selective about things that you post.

Overall, I think that your piece is logically ordered, and flows well, and there are no major grammatical issues. In addition to my earlier suggestion of including more primary and secondary elements, another suggestion I have for improving would be to add a few more images, for example, maybe one of the activity feed, or a more recent profile picture, so that you can compare and better illustrate the difference and your growth in maturity on your Facebook profile. Very well done, though! -Kristen