Talk:Hanwenbo Yang

Peer Review 1:

I like the topic that you chose as your theme: the idea of your Facebook profile maturing as you age. I think this is something that happens to a lot of people, and it is interesting to see an actual transition process laid out in your piece. I also like that you talk about a variety of primary sources (profile pictures, about me, activity feed, likes), however I think it would be interesting to maybe talk about a few other things, such as: cover photo (since this is a relatively new addition to Facebook, has what you do with your cover photo changed at all?), secondary sources (do photos that others have uploaded/ways that others interact with you on Facebook also show more maturity in recent years, or is this something only your primary aspects show?). It's also good that you mention that as your Facebook has matured, it hasn't necessarily become more accurate - you just now are more selective about things that you post.

Overall, I think that your piece is logically ordered, and flows well, and there are no major grammatical issues. In addition to my earlier suggestion of including more primary and secondary elements, another suggestion I have for improving would be to add a few more images, for example, maybe one of the activity feed, or a more recent profile picture, so that you can compare and better illustrate the difference and your growth in maturity on your Facebook profile. Very well done, though! -Kristen

Peer Review 2:

Wenbo, it was really interesting reading your perspective on your Facebook page. Like Kristen, I thought it was a clever idea of using temporality as a theme for your autobiography since it helped better my understanding of how you felt about each aspect of your Facebook page. To help improve your page, I was particularly interested in your "Activity Feed" Section since there might be an issue of privacy behind your reasoning of why you dislike this Facebook feature. Perhaps it will be a great addition to further mature this section. Additionally, you can develop your like Section more. I'm surprised that you liked 485 different topics- it seems like you didn't unlike many of your likes throughout the years. Is there a reason why? How has these likes define the person you are today, and how does it retract from your portrayal to the general public? Knowing you as an individual outside of school, I really appreciated the fact that your personality shone out in this assignment. Generally the flow of your autobiography is easy to follow, but I really don't see the connectivity with your titles. I think it's more of a nit-picky criticism than an improvement that is necessary. You definitely had a strong introduction section. I liked your integration of other social media sites that you used and how that transitioned you into using Facebook. Great work overall and I look forward to reading your final product. -Melissa