Difference between revisions of "Talk:Educational Technology"

Revision as of 16:51, 3 February 2022

I know that this is on the short side for the draft, I have had a tough couple of weeks mentally so I tried to get as much fleshed out as I could, and am going to work hard to make my final much more robust! -author, Sarah

Peer Feedback - Julia

Totally understand having a ~rough~ first draft! Mine is the same way :) I really like your topic overall and I think it will make for a really interesting and informative article.

1. Length

Not yet at 3000 words as you know - what you have so far is about 462 words.

2. Structure/3 Main Components

Opening paragraph: Your opening paragraph is off to a good start! It definitely introduces your topic well and provides a straightforward description of what Educational Technology is. I'm not sure if you were finished with it, but I would make it slightly longer - if you do choose to make your topics Ethics of EdTech, you could add a brief description on what ethics is and how it ties into this topics.

The body of the article in one or more sections: I can see from your outline that you definitely have an organized article that contains 3 main overarching sections and further sub-sections. Great job!

Statements are backed up by references to reliable sources: So far, all of your factual statements are backed up by sources and are properly cited in the references section.

3. Clarity

It is clear to me what the article will be focusing on and what Educational Technology is, and what the points of ethical concern are. Looking at your outline, I'm wondering if it would make more sense to categorize your topic as an "Ethics of..." topic since it looks like half of your article will focus on the ethics of EdTech. This is obviously up to you but would definitely categorize the article is more ehtics-based instead of just focusing on what Educational Technology is.

4. Objective Reporting

You do a good job maintaining a neutral point of view throughout your article. The only thing I would suggest that you pay close attention to is the Ethics section - talking about controversial perspectives or points of debate can be difficult to keep a completely neutral view. For example, your first line in the accessibility section is "many educational technology tools lack adequate accessibility functionalities". To make this a little more neutral I might say something like "critics of educational technology devices argue that..." or something along those lines. What you have isn't a noticeable opinion or anything like that, but does kind of paint EdTech in a more negative light so that's why I'm pointing it out!