Talk:Educational Technology
I know that this is on the short side for the draft, I have had a tough couple of weeks mentally so I tried to get as much fleshed out as I could, and am going to work hard to make my final much more robust! -author, Sarah
Peer Feedback - Julia
Totally understand having a ~rough~ first draft! Mine is the same way :) I really like your topic overall and I think it will make for a really interesting and informative article. I think you hit all the basic criteria so far so you just need to work on finishing what you have outlined!
1. Length
Your article is not yet at 3000 words as you probably know - what you have so far is about 462 words. I’m sure you’ll definitely be able to get to around 3000 by finishing out the sections that you have listed in your current outline so I’m not worried about that.
2. Structure/3 Main Components
Opening paragraph: Your opening paragraph is off to a good start! It definitely introduces your topic well and provides a straightforward description of what Educational Technology is. I'm not sure if you were finished with it, but I would make it slightly longer - if you do choose to make your topics Ethics of Educational Technology (I talk more about this in the clarity section), you could add a brief description on what ethics is and how it ties into these topics.
The body of the article in one or more sections: I can see from your outline that you definitely have an organized article that contains 3 main overarching sections and further sub-sections. Great job! It might be helpful to break the History section into more subsections as well? I could potentially see it making sense to have a section for certain time periods involving technology and education, if that would make sense.
Statements are backed up by references to reliable sources: So far, all of your factual statements are backed up by sources and are properly cited in the references section. I don’t see any statements of fact that do not have citations to support them.
3. Clarity
It is clear to me what the article will be focusing on and what Educational Technology is, and what the points of ethical concern are. Looking at your outline, I'm wondering if it would make more sense to categorize your topic as an "Ethics of..." topic since it looks like half of your article will focus on the ethics of educational technology. This is obviously up to you but it would definitely categorize the article as being about the ethics part of it instead of just focusing on what educational technology is, with a segue into the ethics surrounding the topic.
4. Objective Reporting
You do a really good job maintaining a neutral point of view throughout your article. The only thing I would suggest that you pay close attention to is in the ethics section - when talking about controversial perspectives or points of debate it can be difficult to keep a completely neutral view. For example, your first line in the accessibility section under Ethical Concerns is "many educational technology tools lack adequate accessibility functionalities". To make this a little more neutral I might suggest that you say something like "critics of educational technology devices argue that..." or something along those lines. What you have isn't a glaring opinion or anything like that, but it does kind of paint educational technology in a more negative light so that's why I'm pointing it out!
