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I think overall the seriousness of the purpose was alright! I left feeling like I didn't know the "real" Daniel Sancricca. I think I have a good idea about the surface Daniel, but I would have like the "why" question to be answered. | I think overall the seriousness of the purpose was alright! I left feeling like I didn't know the "real" Daniel Sancricca. I think I have a good idea about the surface Daniel, but I would have like the "why" question to be answered. | ||
| − | As far of the quality of the writing, I would say the author did a great job overall! Everything made perfectly logical sense. I didn't see anything wrong with his grammar or style. Under the Family section, it does become a bit redundant, but other than that I liked it!. I enjoyed how clean the layout was. I would have liked to have seen a few more pictures! Maybe one that shows which bands you have liked! That would really enforce that music paragraph. | + | As far of the quality of the writing, I would say the author did a great job overall! Everything made perfectly logical sense. I didn't see anything wrong with his grammar or style. Under the Family section, it does become a bit redundant, but other than that I liked it!. I enjoyed how clean the layout was. I would have liked to have seen a few more pictures! Maybe one that shows which bands you have liked! That would really enforce that music paragraph. I think that everything you say was genuine, however, I think you can go one step further and really enlighten the reader to who the Daniel behind the profile is. |
Good job Daniel! | Good job Daniel! | ||
Revision as of 19:29, 15 November 2012
I really like the author's introduction to this assignment. I think it set up a very defined portrayal of who he is. However, I do think that he could have analyzed himself a bit deeper. He talked about how he would like to be a doctor. It would have been really interesting for him to maybe talk about why this is important to him and how these desires really make him unique. When the author talks about his different identities, i feel that he might be able to explore those in a bit more depth as well. Most of the information I read I think I could find if I went through his profile as well. Under the identities section, I liked how he talked about how his music taste can really be coined on his Facebook profile because of spotify, and "liking" music. I can tell the author is very passionate about music. I liked how the author discusses hwy he controls what photos he picks as his profile picture. Under his about me section, I do think he has a lot of room to expand. He could have included why he chooses to put x,y,z up and why he chose not to post a,b,c. I think overall the seriousness of the purpose was alright! I left feeling like I didn't know the "real" Daniel Sancricca. I think I have a good idea about the surface Daniel, but I would have like the "why" question to be answered.
As far of the quality of the writing, I would say the author did a great job overall! Everything made perfectly logical sense. I didn't see anything wrong with his grammar or style. Under the Family section, it does become a bit redundant, but other than that I liked it!. I enjoyed how clean the layout was. I would have liked to have seen a few more pictures! Maybe one that shows which bands you have liked! That would really enforce that music paragraph. I think that everything you say was genuine, however, I think you can go one step further and really enlighten the reader to who the Daniel behind the profile is.
Good job Daniel!
