Talk:Daniel Sancricca

I really like the author's introduction to this assignment. I think it set up a very defined portrayal of who he is. However, I do think that he could have analyzed himself a bit deeper. He talked about how he would like to be a doctor. It would have been really interesting for him to maybe talk about why this is important to him and how these desires really make him unique. When the author talks about his different identities, i feel that he might be able to explore those in a bit more depth as well. Most of the information I read I think I could find if I went through his profile as well. Under the identities section, I liked how he talked about how his music taste can really be coined on his Facebook profile because of spotify, and "liking" music. I can tell the author is very passionate about music. I liked how the author discusses hwy he controls what photos he picks as his profile picture. Under his about me section, I do think he has a lot of room to expand. He could have included why he chooses to put x,y,z up and why he chose not to post a,b,c. I think overall the seriousness of the purpose was alright! I left feeling like I didn't know the "real" Daniel Sancricca. I think I have a good idea about the surface Daniel, but I would have like the "why" question to be answered.

As far of the quality of the writing, I would say the author did a great job overall! Everything made perfectly logical sense. I didn't see anything wrong with his grammar or style. Under the Family section, it does become a bit redundant, but other than that I liked it!. I enjoyed how clean the layout was. I would have liked to have seen a few more pictures! Maybe one that shows which bands you have liked! That would really enforce that music paragraph. I think that everything you say was genuine, however, I think you can go one step further and really enlighten the reader to who the Daniel behind the profile is.

Good job Daniel!

2nd Review: I enjoyed how genuine your analysis and description of your Facebook identity was, Daniel. You do a great job at keeping honest and describing how you use Facebook, how your real-life identity is reflected on Facebook, and what information you put into your online identity. I can easily relate to your love of music and I also use the Spotify app the same way.

I would have liked to see you explore more into the part where you break down parts of your Facebook page, such as describing how you deal with people tagging you that you may not like linked to your profile. Also, I would have liked to see further analysis of your basic info section, as to why you put up certain details and how comfortable you are with having those Facebook "friends" you don't know very well to be looking at it. Overall, I would say I feel like I get a good sense of who you are and how you use Facebook to reflect your various identities and interests. I found the flow of your article to be well-paced and really liked the manner in which you broke down your personal identities and the different parts of your Facebook page, making it an enjoyable read.

-Jason Rho