Difference between revisions of "Talk:Chase Austin"
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It was so nice to read your autobiography and learn more about you, I just want to say that your first sentence was the perfect sentence to start off with! I loved how you offered a unique experience with using online social media platforms compared to many of your friends when first starting off! I also liked how you have your subtitles because it made it easier for me to follow your story and see your transitions with technology from middle school to college. | It was so nice to read your autobiography and learn more about you, I just want to say that your first sentence was the perfect sentence to start off with! I loved how you offered a unique experience with using online social media platforms compared to many of your friends when first starting off! I also liked how you have your subtitles because it made it easier for me to follow your story and see your transitions with technology from middle school to college. | ||
| − | I did want to say that you are missing your college life section, I am assuming because you will be adding more to it for your revision, which I look forward to finish reading! There were a few minor errors like you said mew middle school, instead of new middle school. You also said it awesome, instead of it was awesome and another one I noticed was when you said , which should of been I didn't know why. | + | I did want to say that you are missing your college life section, I am assuming because you will be adding more to it for your revision, which I look forward to finish reading! There were a few minor errors like you said mew middle school, instead of new middle school. You also said it awesome, instead of it was awesome and another one I noticed was when you said I didn't wee why, which should of been I didn't know why. There were not distractions because I got what you were trying to say, but you may want to consider changing that! |
| − | I honestly think this was a really good draft, it would of been nice to have a catchy title, instead of just your name. Lastly, I want to give you a suggestion going forward with the revision. I learned a lot about you and your preferences when it comes to using online platforms, but I didn't really learn about the type of content you post, which focuses more on your online identity. Maybe next time, you can add a sample post and talk more about that. What can we learn from you based on the type of stuff you post and why you post it | + | I honestly think this was a really good draft, it would of been nice to have a catchy title, instead of just your name. Lastly, I want to give you a suggestion going forward with the revision. I learned a lot about you and your preferences when it comes to using online platforms, but I didn't really learn about the type of content you post, which focuses more on your online identity. Maybe next time, you can add a sample post and talk more about that. What can we learn from you based on the type of stuff you post and why you post it? |
| − | Also no pictures!! You should add a few!! | + | Also no pictures!! You should add a few!! Good luck with the revision and again great job! |
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Revision as of 17:54, 21 February 2018
Hi Chase--
It was so nice to read your autobiography and learn more about you, I just want to say that your first sentence was the perfect sentence to start off with! I loved how you offered a unique experience with using online social media platforms compared to many of your friends when first starting off! I also liked how you have your subtitles because it made it easier for me to follow your story and see your transitions with technology from middle school to college.
I did want to say that you are missing your college life section, I am assuming because you will be adding more to it for your revision, which I look forward to finish reading! There were a few minor errors like you said mew middle school, instead of new middle school. You also said it awesome, instead of it was awesome and another one I noticed was when you said I didn't wee why, which should of been I didn't know why. There were not distractions because I got what you were trying to say, but you may want to consider changing that!
I honestly think this was a really good draft, it would of been nice to have a catchy title, instead of just your name. Lastly, I want to give you a suggestion going forward with the revision. I learned a lot about you and your preferences when it comes to using online platforms, but I didn't really learn about the type of content you post, which focuses more on your online identity. Maybe next time, you can add a sample post and talk more about that. What can we learn from you based on the type of stuff you post and why you post it?
Also no pictures!! You should add a few!! Good luck with the revision and again great job!
----- Malaysha D. White -----
