Talk:Chase Austin
Hi Chase--
It was so nice to read your autobiography and learn more about you, I just want to say that your first sentence was the perfect sentence to start off with! I loved how you offered a unique experience with using online social media platforms compared to many of your friends when first starting off! I also liked how you have your subtitles because it made it easier for me to follow your story and see your transitions with technology from middle school to college.
I did want to say that you are missing your college life section, I am assuming because you will be adding more to it for your revision, which I look forward to finish reading! There were a few minor errors like you said mew middle school, instead of new middle school. You also said it awesome, instead of it was awesome and another one I noticed was when you said I didn't wee why, which should of been I didn't know why. There were not distractions because I got what you were trying to say, but you may want to consider changing that!
I honestly think this was a really good draft, it would of been nice to have a catchy title, instead of just your name. Lastly, I want to give you a suggestion going forward with the revision. I learned a lot about you and your preferences when it comes to using online platforms, but I didn't really learn about the type of content you post, which focuses more on your online identity. Maybe next time, you can add a sample post and talk more about that. What can we learn from you based on the type of stuff you post and why you post it?
Also no pictures!! You should add a few!! Good luck with the revision and again great job!
----- Malaysha D. White -----
Hey Chase --
Nice post, I think this is a very unique perspective that most people our age do not have. This is really similar to my experience as someone who didn't have any social media until halfway throughout high school. I think the chronological ordering of your experience is a good idea, it shows the evolution of your ideas and thoughts towards social media. I liked your analysis on how not having social media somewhat ostracized you from your friends who did. Some suggestions would be to add more subsections. Maybe talk about your social media use today and how and expand on which platforms that you use. Like the comment above, definitely post pictures, I'd like to see how you've built an online identity after starting late. Although I liked how you said that you find it difficult to constantly post I think you should still expand on these ideas with more evidence and ideas. Lastly connect your ideas to the readings, there is a lot of quotes and ideas that you could use. Overall very interesting perspective, with some revision could be a very enjoyable read. --Sam Fennelly
Hi Chase,
Your colleagues’ comments above are spot on. Please consider them fully for your revision. If you have any questions,, or need help, please let me know.
Best,
Corina
