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I really enjoyed reading this piece and I feel as though I got a lot of insight into who you are as a person. I really like how you tied your autobiography into the readings. The quotes were well placed and made a lot of sense in the context of your paper. That being said, I think I learned more about you from your personal reflection than I learned from your reflection of your Facebook (and Instagram) accounts. You illustrate what isn't on your Facebook timeline, but what is on it? I think you could shorten your introduction about what brought you to Facebook and use that space to analyze what I would see if I looked you up on Facebook? Why did you choose the profile and cover photo you chose? I think the real challenge for your revision is to discuss the parts of yourself that you don't hide from social media. I think your Instagram would be a good place to start because it appears to have quite a few posts. | I really enjoyed reading this piece and I feel as though I got a lot of insight into who you are as a person. I really like how you tied your autobiography into the readings. The quotes were well placed and made a lot of sense in the context of your paper. That being said, I think I learned more about you from your personal reflection than I learned from your reflection of your Facebook (and Instagram) accounts. You illustrate what isn't on your Facebook timeline, but what is on it? I think you could shorten your introduction about what brought you to Facebook and use that space to analyze what I would see if I looked you up on Facebook? Why did you choose the profile and cover photo you chose? I think the real challenge for your revision is to discuss the parts of yourself that you don't hide from social media. I think your Instagram would be a good place to start because it appears to have quite a few posts. | ||
| + | An additional small note, is that you may want to enlarge some photos, I had to zoom in to make sense of a couple. | ||
| + | Good luck on your revision! - Julie Burke | ||
Revision as of 19:51, 15 February 2018
This is a great piece of writing. The best I have seen in years ...Professor Conway.
I really enjoyed reading this piece and I feel as though I got a lot of insight into who you are as a person. I really like how you tied your autobiography into the readings. The quotes were well placed and made a lot of sense in the context of your paper. That being said, I think I learned more about you from your personal reflection than I learned from your reflection of your Facebook (and Instagram) accounts. You illustrate what isn't on your Facebook timeline, but what is on it? I think you could shorten your introduction about what brought you to Facebook and use that space to analyze what I would see if I looked you up on Facebook? Why did you choose the profile and cover photo you chose? I think the real challenge for your revision is to discuss the parts of yourself that you don't hide from social media. I think your Instagram would be a good place to start because it appears to have quite a few posts.
An additional small note, is that you may want to enlarge some photos, I had to zoom in to make sense of a couple.
Good luck on your revision! - Julie Burke
