Talk:Blake Schewe

Hey Blake,

First of all, I wanted to say I really enjoyed your autobiography. I am similar to you in how my content on Facebook is created: through tags. Having been several months since I posted a status, I can relate to not wanting to share a large portion of your life on Facebook and instead having others do it for you.

You addressed how closely the "real you" resembles the Facebook you very well. One thing that I would change, right off the top, is adding more personal anecdotes or examples from your life showing how they parallel the way you present yourself on Facebook. Drawing these parallels to your identity on Facebook would deepen the discussion about how your online and real life are similar. I really enjoyed your personal anecdote about your flight over Cuba; both the opening and closing were gripping, great job!

In terms of the quality of writing, I though your post flowed very well from one idea to the other. I particularly liked the (overall) chronological order you implemented in your post. It allowed me to go through your stages of Facebook use and analyze it from your perspective a lot better. Moving from your two primary audiences (friends and family) worked really well, as well as closing out with privacy settings and your conclusion about why you DO use Facebook, and how this ties back to you in real life. I agree with this wholly, as I tend to keep things to myself as well, unless I think of something as interesting and then post it. It really shows the change of Facebook use and representation from high school into college, and it is a journey I experienced as well. Very well written. Great read. Thanks!

Cheers,

Jose