Talk:Ava Randa

Comment by Flannery O'Donnell:

Ava,

I thought this was a well written summary of your findings, and it is clear that you put in a lot of effort when searching for the data there is about you online. It also flowed logically and was, overall, well written. In the revision, I think you should include a section where you analyze what this online information says about you. Do you feel like it was representative of your identity? Do you feel like your identity was portrayed consistently across different online platforms? Include the extent to which your online identity is authentic. I think bringing in these concepts would enhance your analysis of your online identity.

Additionally, I think you should try to incorporate one or two more readings from this course. If you assess your identity relative to what you define as the "real you" or your "genuine self", I think you will find it easier to tie in concepts from the readings.

Lastly, developing a thesis or sticking to a theme throughout your writing would enhance it even further. Like I said before, I think this was a really great synopsis of your findings online. I think it would be even better if you added more analysis of these findings and then tried to incorporate some additional course material as well.