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Great Wiki Andy! I was immediately drawn in by your the picture of your post and was pleased that the flow of your writing never skipped a beat. I thought that all of your screen shots of posts were well positioned and supported your online identity. I also enjoyed how you utilized your online persona to further justices in ways you felt made an impact. I wish you put more emphasis on your own experiences and personal dialogue similar to what you did in the initial paragraph rather than on the position of the LGBTQ community as a whole. Your own experiences are very gripping and more powerful for me as reader who was left wanting to read more. I also think that you could have incorporated the readings in a little more. Overall great work Andy! -- Tyler Walker | Great Wiki Andy! I was immediately drawn in by your the picture of your post and was pleased that the flow of your writing never skipped a beat. I thought that all of your screen shots of posts were well positioned and supported your online identity. I also enjoyed how you utilized your online persona to further justices in ways you felt made an impact. I wish you put more emphasis on your own experiences and personal dialogue similar to what you did in the initial paragraph rather than on the position of the LGBTQ community as a whole. Your own experiences are very gripping and more powerful for me as reader who was left wanting to read more. I also think that you could have incorporated the readings in a little more. Overall great work Andy! -- Tyler Walker | ||
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| + | Excellent Wiki post Andy! You did a great job assessing your authentic self and talked about the gap between your online identity and real life identity. The logical flow of the entire post was well thought out and I really liked how you transitioned from one phase of social media to the next. Furthermore, I thought that the subheading “A Little Bird Told Me” was clever and catchy. In terms of aspects that you could work on, I think that some of the sentences could be reworded so that it would be flow smoother. In addition, I think you could draw more on ideas from the reading. Overall, this was a great Wiki post and was an interesting read! – Jack Zhang | ||
Revision as of 16:28, 21 February 2018
Great Wiki Andy! I was immediately drawn in by your the picture of your post and was pleased that the flow of your writing never skipped a beat. I thought that all of your screen shots of posts were well positioned and supported your online identity. I also enjoyed how you utilized your online persona to further justices in ways you felt made an impact. I wish you put more emphasis on your own experiences and personal dialogue similar to what you did in the initial paragraph rather than on the position of the LGBTQ community as a whole. Your own experiences are very gripping and more powerful for me as reader who was left wanting to read more. I also think that you could have incorporated the readings in a little more. Overall great work Andy! -- Tyler Walker
Excellent Wiki post Andy! You did a great job assessing your authentic self and talked about the gap between your online identity and real life identity. The logical flow of the entire post was well thought out and I really liked how you transitioned from one phase of social media to the next. Furthermore, I thought that the subheading “A Little Bird Told Me” was clever and catchy. In terms of aspects that you could work on, I think that some of the sentences could be reworded so that it would be flow smoother. In addition, I think you could draw more on ideas from the reading. Overall, this was a great Wiki post and was an interesting read! – Jack Zhang
