Talk:Andy Bui

Great Wiki Andy! I was immediately drawn in by your the picture of your post and was pleased that the flow of your writing never skipped a beat. I thought that all of your screen shots of posts were well positioned and supported your online identity. I also enjoyed how you utilized your online persona to further justices in ways you felt made an impact. I wish you put more emphasis on your own experiences and personal dialogue similar to what you did in the initial paragraph rather than on the position of the LGBTQ community as a whole. Your own experiences are very gripping and more powerful for me as reader who was left wanting to read more. I also think that you could have incorporated the readings in a little more. Overall great work Andy! -- Tyler Walker

Excellent Wiki post Andy! You did a great job assessing your authentic self and talked about the gap between your online identity and real life identity. The Wiki post does a good job describing your online identity formation and the presentation practices that you decide to take. You definitely engaged with the assignment and displayed genuine effect given that you talked about such a sensitive topic. As such, it was clear that you assessed your identity in social media platforms relative to the real you. Furthermore, I think you did a great job connecting your ideas to the overarching ethical questions discussed throughout this course. The introduction definitely hooked me in, and allowed me to infer what your paper was going to be about. The logical flow of the entire post was well thought out and I really liked how you transitioned from one phase of social media to the next. In regards, to potential changes in structure, I think the placement of all your text and pictures are well thought out and is aesthetically pleasing. Furthermore, I thought that the subheading “A Little Bird Told Me” was clever and catchy. The concluding paragraph summarizes the main points and link back to the claims mentioned throughout your Wiki post. In fact, I liked that you included your stance on the constructions of the self and authenticity in the online environment. The writing style is appropriate for the audience and provides all necessary background information. I did not find any problems with grammar, punctuation, spelling or any other writing conventions. In terms of aspects that you could work on, I think that some of the sentences could be reworded so that it would be flow smoother. In addition, I think you could draw more on ideas from the reading. Overall, this was a great Wiki post and was an interesting read! – Jack Zhang