Talk:Alyssa Roach

Comment from Julie Palmer: Hi Alyssa, I really liked your statement! I thought your first data analogy was clever and a good way to make this assignment more personable. I think you could do even more with this concept to make the statement feel more cohesive. The middle section was good, but very long. As the reader, I wanted it to be broke up into sections which I think you could easily do since you are discussing many topics. You could even bring the first date analogy into this by making clever sounding headings that make the information more digestible. I also would have liked to hear more specifics on the data you found and how exactly it doesn't show the complete you. You definitely touched on this, but it felt slightly incomplete and left me curious! Overall, I thought this was a really interesting way to attack this assignment. Good job!