Talk:Alyssa Roach

Comment from Julie Palmer: Hi Alyssa, I really liked your statement! I thought your first data analogy was clever and a good way to make this assignment more personable. I think you could do even more with this concept to make the statement feel more cohesive. The middle section was good, but very long. As the reader, I wanted it to be broke up into sections which I think you could easily do since you are discussing many topics. You could even bring the first date analogy into this by making clever sounding headings that make the information more digestible. I also would have liked to hear more specifics on the data you found and how exactly it doesn't show the complete you. You definitely touched on this, but it felt slightly incomplete and left me curious! Overall, I thought this was a really interesting way to attack this assignment. Good job!

Hi Alyssa!

I really liked how you approached writing this, and it was nice how you incorporated your voice to make your statement more personal. I also really enjoyed hearing about how online identity and statistics have affected you, and how your opinions on them have changed. I think one suggestion I have is that you could maybe give more specific examples of how you found data or information about you to support what you say. I think you could also consider dividing up your "Analysis" section into a few subsections so the reader can more easily absorb what you are talking about. All in all, I thought this was super interesting and I really liked your style of writing, especially your use of metaphors and rhetorical questions!

— Catherine Yang

Hi Alyssa,

I really liked how you approached your profile as a very reflective analysis of your data identity. You started by describing how you first forms your data identity through limited touch into the digital world, and then how you grew as a person with an online identity from a young age. I think this origin story is a good way to help reader understand your perspective and how you've existed in the digital world over time! When you later reflected on the harmful threats or opportunities that your data identity could lead to, I liked how you walked us through what would go through your mind if your public data was used in the case of an online dating app meet up. This is a great scenario that demonstrates how your data would be realistically threatening to you. This deifintely helped me get a sense of how you feel and how you approach your data profile. -Molly Wu