Difference between revisions of "Talk:Alexandra Cortez"
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| − | Hi, Alexandra. You start with a strong introduction, and I'm almost immediately hooked to read more. I think you have a legitimate (for better or worse) concern regarding your name sharing with AOC, and hope it doesn't negatively affect your future. Quick fixes under "Social Media" - "...data that I had posted about previously job experience." Also under "Arrests" - it seems your last sentence was cutoff? | + | Hi, Alexandra. You start with a strong introduction, and I'm almost immediately hooked to read more. I think you have a legitimate (for better or worse) concern regarding your name sharing with AOC, and hope it doesn't negatively affect your future. Quick fixes under "Social Media" - "...data that I had posted about previously job experience." Also under "Arrests" - it seems your last sentence was cutoff? Second paragraph of "Getting it wrong" - missing an apostrophe in "The important part of Instant Checkmate's...". Lastly in your conclusion, maybe switch "breath of relief" with "sigh of relief"?. Unless that was intentional. Side note: Being in a similar situation, I wish you the best of luck when searching for answers to your family secrets, controversies, and secret half-siblings. |
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Revision as of 20:27, 19 February 2020
Hi, Alexandra. You start with a strong introduction, and I'm almost immediately hooked to read more. I think you have a legitimate (for better or worse) concern regarding your name sharing with AOC, and hope it doesn't negatively affect your future. Quick fixes under "Social Media" - "...data that I had posted about previously job experience." Also under "Arrests" - it seems your last sentence was cutoff? Second paragraph of "Getting it wrong" - missing an apostrophe in "The important part of Instant Checkmate's...". Lastly in your conclusion, maybe switch "breath of relief" with "sigh of relief"?. Unless that was intentional. Side note: Being in a similar situation, I wish you the best of luck when searching for answers to your family secrets, controversies, and secret half-siblings.
- Chris Pena
