Talk:Alan Yu
Hello Alan. This is a good data identity report. You mentioned your first encounter with the Internet, how you look like in Google and Data Broker Report and your attitude towards the privacy issue. From your identity report, it seems that you successfully managed to control your information: share what you want to share and keep your secrets secret. You also revealed that although you got a very "comprehensive" data broker report, a lot of information is incorrect. It seems serious that there are lots of criminal records in the report even though it is not you. It may help if contents like the correlation between the data broker report and your life are included. For example, you mentioned those incorrect criminal records. What will be the potential influences? Will they negatively affect your interview or something else where background screening may occur? Also, what your interaction with the Internet determines your tendency about your privacy? By adding these, our readers may have a clear idea about how your personality may be related to your data identity.
--Yunhao Wang
Hi, Alan. I really enjoyed reading your Data Identity report. The introduction was strong. I really liked how you started this piece with the beginning of your "digital footprint" in the second grade when you started to accumulate digital data. Overall, I think you did a great job of assessing your data identity. You broke down the name search in Google and the accuracy of the data broker which were the main parts of the assignments.
I like the privacy section where you mention the loss of value stories have because they have been posted online and the issue this can pose when meeting new people. So many people nowadays post things that are happening in their everyday lives from accomplishments to hardships they are encountering to their "followers" online so I thought it was relevant in the topic of privacy. However, I believe the entire Privacy sections didn’t really tie into your data identity other than the first couple of sentences where you explain your major. It was more of an explanation of data privacy and I am not entirely certain if that fits in with the autobiographical aspect of this assignment. The sections flowed well especially with the introduction and conclusion paragraphs tieing it all together but I did find a few grammar errors. I find using Grammarly helpful in editing papers and ensuring that my punctuation is correct. Like I said in the beginning, I really enjoyed this piece and the ending “you would have a greater understanding of who I really am” because it was really well explained throughout the paper what was and wasn't found about you.
-- Carol Castro
