Talk:Alan Yu

Hello Alan. This is a good data identity report. You mentioned your first encounter with the Internet, how you look like in Google and Data Broker Report and your attitude towards the privacy issue. From your identity report, it seems that you successfully managed to control your information: share what you want to share and keep your secrets secret. You also revealed that although you got a very "comprehensive" data broker report, a lot of information is incorrect. It seems serious that there are lots of criminal records in the report even though it is not you. It may help if contents like the correlation between the data broker report and your life are included. For example, you mentioned those incorrect criminal records. What will be the potential influences? Will they negatively affect your interview or something else where background screening may occur? Also, what your interaction with the Internet determines your tendency about your privacy? By adding these, our readers may have a clear idea about how your personality may be related to your data identity.

--Yunhao Wang

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Hi, Alan. I really enjoyed reading your Data Identity report. The introduction was strong. I really liked how you started this piece with the beginning of your "digital footprint" in the second grade when you started to accumulate digital data. Overall, I think you did a great job of assessing your data identity. You broke down the name search in Google and the accuracy of the data broker which were the main parts of the assignments. I like the privacy section where you mention the loss of value stories have because they have been posted online and the issue this can pose when meeting new people. So many people nowadays post things that are happening in their everyday lives from accomplishments to hardships they are encountering to their "followers" online so I thought it was relevant in the topic of privacy. However, I believe the entire Privacy sections didn’t really tie into your data identity other than the first couple of sentences where you explain your major. It was more of an explanation of data privacy and I am not entirely certain if that fits in with the autobiographical aspect of this assignment. The sections flowed well especially with the introduction and conclusion paragraphs tieing it all together but I did find a few grammar errors. I find using Grammarly helpful in editing papers and ensuring that my punctuation is correct. Like I said in the beginning, I really enjoyed this piece and the ending “you would have a greater understanding of who I really am” because it was really well explained throughout the paper what was and wasn't found about you.

-- Carol Castro

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Hi Alan,

I really liked the way you wrote your introduction. I found it to be an interesting story as its fun to look back at the first time you were introduced to the online world as many people start at various ages. I also appreciate your honesty that you just added people on Facebook that you went to school with, regardless if you were actually friends or not. I feel like many people, as I, did the same. You also did a good job on expressing how you value your online identity, which transitions well to your Privacy section and conclusion, where you then show more self awareness on what about you is online.

Although your Google search results were explained well, I thought that the your Data Broker section could be improved. Do you have any idea how the information was obtained? What are your thoughts on its availability to the public? I think answering either of those questions in this section could really strengthen it and bring it all together. Your Privacy section did also talk about the idea that posting "stories" online causes it to essentially lose its value, but I didn't see how it really ties to you specifically since you never mentioned your uses of social media besides when you were young trying to play flash games. I think maybe adding another section to explain that would help a lot. There are also slight grammatical errors in each paragraph so make sure to proof read or use Grammarly as others have stated. For example, in your Google search section, I don't think you used the word "photogenic" correctly.

Overall, I think this draft is a very good start. Keep it up!

Best, Steven

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Hi Alan,

I liked the personable start to your article to introduce why you created these social media accounts. I also really enjoyed your thoughts on privacy as a computer science major. You recognize the proliferation of data usage in modern technology, such as recommendation systems, and the dangers of such in the future. You made your stance of privacy and data identity clear. I also really enjoyed your touches of humor within the article that show your creativity as a writer. Some things that could be improved are the Data Brokers section. I think you could expand on that data you found, on why you think it was inaccurate, and what kind of data profile you have that others may see. I think there a lot of paths you can explore in this section.

Good article though, and I look forward to seeing how it grows.

Qhoe.