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(Elizabeth Bott's comment on Aidan Haase)
 
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One thing I think you could improve to make the analysis of your identity stronger is discussing the difference between your two google searches, since one was more academic based and one more 'personal'. This could further prove your thesis. Overall, I think your analysis and implication sections were strong and clear about the effects of lacking a 'full identity' online. I thought the logic and flow of your pargraphs sounded good and there were no clear grammatical issues, so good job!
 
One thing I think you could improve to make the analysis of your identity stronger is discussing the difference between your two google searches, since one was more academic based and one more 'personal'. This could further prove your thesis. Overall, I think your analysis and implication sections were strong and clear about the effects of lacking a 'full identity' online. I thought the logic and flow of your pargraphs sounded good and there were no clear grammatical issues, so good job!
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== Alex Wang's Comment ==
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Hey Aidan,
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading your data identity statement. I thought you were very organized and structured with your page. Furthermore, I liked how you discussed two queries and how one seems to be more up to date with how you are today.

Revision as of 03:50, 25 February 2021

Elizabeth Bott's Comment

Hi Aidan,

I really enjoyed reading your article. I liked how you included multiple search queries to help defend your thesis. Adding the current institution definitely made it clear how well developed your professional and academic online identity is. I also liked how you added the part about your Twitter and using it as an explanation into why your online identity might be more school based. Furthermore, I think it was useful to include specific parts of your 'personal' identity that aren't found online, like plants and social justice, because it helped highlight the clear divide between your real and online identity.

One thing I think you could improve to make the analysis of your identity stronger is discussing the difference between your two google searches, since one was more academic based and one more 'personal'. This could further prove your thesis. Overall, I think your analysis and implication sections were strong and clear about the effects of lacking a 'full identity' online. I thought the logic and flow of your pargraphs sounded good and there were no clear grammatical issues, so good job!

Alex Wang's Comment

Hey Aidan,

I thoroughly enjoyed reading your data identity statement. I thought you were very organized and structured with your page. Furthermore, I liked how you discussed two queries and how one seems to be more up to date with how you are today.