Talk:Julia Pezzullo

I really liked your identity statement and the argument you took with how your parents played a part in your online identity. The information you found on yourself was very interesting and I liked how you looked into some of the data mining sites. I also really liked your use of graphics in the statement. The evidence you used from you search also really helped your argument for why you don't have such a strong online presence.

Overall, to improve your data identity statement I would add the piece from the reading earlier on. I liked how you started with the little narrative about your first phone but I think adding in the idea from the reading sooner would have made you statement stronger from an arguments sense. Also I would have liked to see you reflect more on your evidence throughout the statement. While I found your break down of the evidence from your google search or the sites you checked out to be interesting I also wanted to know more on how this information made you feel or what you thought about it from an ethics point of view. Seeing how your parents played a role in your online presents, you could look into how this affects the ethics of information online.

Commenter: Elizabeth Stehney (estehney)