Talk:Sanika Babtiwale

You present an overall analysis of your online identity throughout the years but I think you could provide more explanation for your intentions or how you think others were perceiving you. You accomplish this in “The Beginning,” but not as much in the following sections. Expand “The Middle” and try to give specific examples of how you presented yourself during this time period. How do you think your Facebook friends reacted to your reduced activity, if at all?

I like that you discuss multiple readings from class, but it takes up a lot of space in your article. I suggest reducing this down to just one or two so you can focus more on speaking specifically about you and your profile. If you do decide to keep them, it might be a good idea to paraphrase rather than directly quote.

In “Two Sides, One Coin,” you mention “I changed from an eager, active user to a cautious one, which is an exact portrayal of my identity.” If I’m interpreting this correctly, I suggest providing more explanation for how or why you’ve become cautious in “real life.”

I like the structure of your page and how it walks the reader through the different stages of your life and corresponding Facebook activity. You provide plentiful, easily viewable images. I like the postscript you have at the end that ties to an interesting article.

I did find one grammatical mistake. For the sentence “Deciding what to reveal about oneself on social media is a serious choice that has to made before any post,” I believe you intended to say “…choice that has to be made.”

- Joshua Walker