Talk:Hope Chen

I really enjoyed your introduction because it was short and to the point which indicates your writing style right from the beginning. As I continued to read I felt that your section titles could be a bit more creative in order to capture the reader all the way down the page. Additionally, the image in Part 1 was a great way to use images to depict what you’re talking about. When I was younger, I also created similar status’ and found the image very relatable.

Another area that can be improved is Part 2. Your introductory sentence is about high school. Therefore, as a reader, I expected the entire Part 2 section to be about this. The part about college is great; however, I think it might make more sense to put that under an additional subheading. Furthermore, in the Hope IRL Vs. Hope of Facebook section, it would be helpful to understand why you have your settings so strangers can see your images and information and how that relates to your online identity.

Finally, your conclusion is really thought provoking and interesting. I am able to really understand the evolution of your Facebook presence. However, it talks about technology and your current life outside of social media in a way that distracts from the core focus of the rest of the writing. If you could tie back how your personal online social identity reflects what you’ve learned over the years, that would pull the whole thing together in a great conclusion!

Overall, great job! I really enjoyed reading it. -Erica Silverman