Difference between revisions of "Talk:Jessica Kim"

Revision as of 17:01, 19 February 2020

Hi Jessica,

I enjoyed reading your post. It's not very surprising that due to the commonality of your name you weren't able to find many results through a Google search. I too, after this assignment, will be more aware of what information I type while online and be more cautious of what can happen with that information. I feel the post was a bit short though. To expand on it, you may want to include some insights from the weekly readings and perhaps be a bit more descriptive about what information you were able to find, without giving it away obviously. This would not just make your post longer, but provide more context into who you are and what information you were or were not able to find. I also feel the post can be enhanced by adding at least one more image, perhaps of the article you were able to find about yourself from high school that you mentioned. I think it would add a personal touch to the post and make it feel more complete.

David Forystek

Emma Luukkonen's Comment:

Jessica,
I found your post very relatable, as my reactions to finding public information about myself were similar. I liked how you brought up using your real name for online shopping, surveys, and websites- I do the same thing. When writing my own statement, I didn't even think about this or the possibility of these websites misusing my data. I agree with David's comment that your post would have benefited from a few more images, and I even think you could have analyzed the image you included a bit more- was it you or someone else, when it was taken, what website it came from, etc. Additionally, I think there are a few different themes that could fit your article: the commonality of your name, your use of a nickname, or your previous lack of concern when putting your data online. As you expand your paper for the revision, I think it would be a good idea to focus predominantly on one of these themes (or a different one) by introducing it as the focus of your paper in the introduction and then relating back to it in each following section. When doing your revision, you also might want to add another section or two: one to compare and contrast the data found in your report versus a Google search, and another to relate your findings back to your theme. After that, if your paper still needs more length, you could also address one of our readings from class in your conclusion.