Talk:Jessica Kim

Hi Jessica,

I enjoyed reading your post. It's not very surprising that due to the commonality of your name you weren't able to find many results through a Google search. I too, after this assignment, will be more aware of what information I type while online and be more cautious of what can happen with that information. I feel the post was a bit short though. To expand on it, you may want to include some insights from the weekly readings and perhaps be a bit more descriptive about what information you were able to find, without giving it away obviously. This would not just make your post longer, but provide more context into who you are and what information you were or were not able to find. I also feel the post can be enhanced by adding at least one more image, perhaps of the article you were able to find about yourself from high school that you mentioned. I think it would add a personal touch to the post and make it feel more complete.

David Forystek

Emma Luukkonen's Comment:

Jessica,
I found your post very relatable, as my reactions to finding public information about myself were similar. I liked how you brought up using your real name for online shopping, surveys, and websites- I do the same thing. When writing my own statement, I didn't even think about this or the possibility of these websites misusing my data. I agree with David's comment that your post would have benefited from a few more images, and I even think you could have analyzed the image you included a bit more- was it you or someone else, when it was taken, what website it came from, etc. Additionally, I think there are a few different themes that could fit your article: the commonality of your name, your use of a nickname, or your previous lack of concern when putting your data online. As you expand your paper for the revision, I think it would be a good idea to focus predominantly on one of these themes (or a different one) by introducing it as the focus of your paper in the introduction and then relating back to it in each following section. When doing your revision, you also might want to add another section or two: one to compare and contrast the data found in your report versus a Google search, and another to relate your findings back to your theme. After that, if your paper still needs more length, you could also address one of our readings from class in your conclusion.

Hi Jessica,

I loved your post. I experienced a lot of the same things, when I search my name with no context almost none of the results are of me. However, when adding a bit of information about myself, I pop up everywhere. I think it would be beneficial if you expanded on the results of your Google search. Perhaps you could include a screenshot of the initial results when you Google your name in order to show the results that are obtained and not about you. If you have social media, you could mention whether you go by Jessica or Jess on social media and whether your social media URLs were included on your data brokers report. Your formatting and voice made the post very easy to read and intriguing to the audience. Overall, this is a great post!

Elise Whitney

Teresa Yuan's Comment:

Hi Jessica,

I found your writing to be clear and easy to follow. And I totally agree with how we should all be more careful when it comes to sharing information online. However, I would suggest you change the title of your image, as it is a bit confusing for people who don't know you personally to tell if that the person in the photo is actually you. You could consider also adding your own photo to compare yourself with the first Jessica Kim that popped up on Google. And since you mentioned that there's a lot of Jessica Kims out there, you could talk about the differences between you and them (or just pick one of them that diverges from you the most). Furthermore, you mentioned that some of the information in your data report was incorrect, were you able to notice any correlation between the details that they got right and the details they got wrong? What's more, as this assignment is supposed to be an autobiographical statement, I would suggest you add more of your personal insights into the post. For example, you mentioned that you are featured in one of your school articles (which I assume is available for everyone to see), how do you feel about having no control over who gets to see your past? Finally, You might want to consider changing the first sentence in your Google section as the same message is already conveyed in your introduction. Make sure you go through your post again before submitting the final revision, I think I saw a typo in your Data Brokers section.

Good luck with your revisions!

Teresa Yuan