Talk:Will Godley

Margot Siegel's Review of Will Godley's MediaWiki Article:

You did a very good job at connecting what you found online to the truth behind your actual interests and lifestyle. It was very interesting that you assessed the fact that you think that part of the reason why your footprint online is quite private is that when you created some of your social media accounts, it was when you were young therefore your parents made sure everything was on private. This has made your online footprint much more secure. Another aspect of this wiki site that I thought made it stronger was the fact that you stated that even though your accounts were private, other people named Will Godley’s accounts came up and you do not want people mistaking you for them. Lastly, I found the points you made about the data brokers are very intriguing, specifically the fact that data brokers sites have agreements that you may not abuse the information, but do not enforce it. I would love to have read even more about this. In addition, the information in the wiki flows well and makes logical sense to me. I was able to understand how you came to the conclusions you did at the end and I was intrigued reading the whole wiki. Also, I thought the pictures added a lot to the wiki in terms of keeping a reader interested, while also providing more information.

This is a good article, it clearly shows you did some deep searching and connecting to what is the truth. I didn't even consider looking into my name on various search engines so that is unique. It does make me wonder why bing didn't have information about you, it is possible because you rarely used bing or its not as powerful of search engine like Google. I think it's a good point to have some fear on how people may misunderstand you. I think its important that people emphasize the potential warnings on misinformation online. One can trust everything they see online and should use their "common sense" or basic knowledge of what may be true or not. It may be unique to look into all search engines (Firefox, internet explorer, etc) and maybe mention a small fact as to why certain search engines show certain information. This is something that may make your argument even stronger.

- Kayla Williams

Katie Forrest's Review of Will Godley's MediaWiki Article:

Your introduction is a great way to give the reader an idea of what your writing about, why, and what they can expect you to discuss as they continue to read.

Your ‘further google search’ paragraph presents an interesting point. However, when describing the fishing picture you could restructure your sentences/improve on the flow of the writing here to make it less confusing to the reader. When you talk about your Twitter account, I think it might be helpful to give the reader specific examples of what kinds of things you post on there, so that they can understand what they would be seeing if they were looking at your Twitter. It will give support to your argument that your Twitter personality is not the same as your real personality.

What differs between the Google searches? Make this clear in the titles.

Also, in your final Google search section its interesting to hear your opinions on the data given out by data brokers, but this might be a good section to integrate some quotes from the readings so that readers can gain some insight on not only what you think about it, but also others.

When writing about Bing, you might consider researching further into why Bing doesn’t initially come up with any of the information Google does. I think this is an important piece of what you’re presenting but you don’t elaborate on it very much.

Your final paragraph ties your writing together well. When you discuss the topic of the “lack of accountability” online, this also might be a good place to integrate some of the readings from class.

Overall, I think that your writing could use a bit more specificity to help the reader understand who you actually are so that the comparison between who you are represented as online is stronger. I also would recommend discussion more of your social media accounts in depth and discussing the image that you hope to portray when you use these platforms so that you can further assess your online data identity. Finally, on a more technical note, I think that your titles of each section could be a bit more succinct. You also need to include materials from the course and proper citations. I would also recommend adding captions to each of your photos so that your reader knows exactly how they relate to their placement and the article.