Talk:Serena Sabuda

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Hi Serena, Overall, I like the structure of your page, which is super clear and easy to read. I really like the fact that when you described your Google searching result, you put your thoughts into it, such as you want to hide your health history. You also mention that social media shows who you are, and I think you can talk more about it as well as some parts of you that are not be found through social media. I also like your mixed feeling about finding your information online. One more suggestion is you can refer to some of the readings when you do the revision. -Clair Peng

Hi Serena, I really enjoyed reading your page! You do a really good job of making it informative while still being personable and easy to read. I also like how you built a narrative with your page, starting with how your digital footprint started from wanting to be like your siblings, and then building your story from there. I also like how you analyze different social media accounts you have and the implications on your privacy separately. I also really liked your analysis at the end about your mixed feelings over some of your personal health history being available and how potential employers could look at that. For your final revision, I think you could spend more time discussing how what you can find online relates to your real-life identity. You discuss how your Pinterest reveals many of your interests, your Spotify could reveal what mood you're in, and there is a lot more of your personal information online. Do you think this accurately represents who you are in real life? Is there something missing or something that represents you inaccurately? Thank you for sharing your story, and I think you did a great job overall! -Rachel Westrick

Hi Serena, Your page was very well written! I like how you split up your write-up into categories, and I also like how your formatted your page. The addition of pictures and their placement was well-done and added to the understanding of the message you were trying to get across. You did a good job of delving into how accurate the portrayal of yourself online was true to your real-life self. The discussion of your Spotify, Pinterest, and your non-profit were good examples and relevant to your message. One thing I think would add to your discussion is the information present on your non-profit website vs the article that was written about you. You talk a lot about how anyone could see some of your health information by going through the website, but you do validate that you are okay with having that information there because of your tie to the non-profit. Maybe you can delve more into the information available about you on the website vs. the article that you would rather not have online and how that they respectively reflect who you are as a person. - Pavitra Srinivasan