Talk:Sean Thomas

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The amount of personal investment you put into the wiki article is easily seen after reading it. It enhances the article greatly and makes for a good read. The paragraphs are also structured and written well. The creative style you've chosen to represent your autobiography is also a good choice as it shows a distinction between your attachment to your facebook and offline identity.

Something that your autobiography could benefit from would be a theme selection. While your article seems to portray it's theme by taking in the paragraphs collectively, a reader would better enjoy your article by telling them the overall theme in the intro paragraph (for example authenticity). The tidbit about the stranger finding your facebook account was a nice addition to set up your autobiography style.

~Miguel Abreu

Miguel, edited in a sentence explaining the theme in the intro. Thank you -Sean :)