Talk:Nell Steinmetz

Morgan Tucker Comment

Hi Nell! Great work! I loved reading about the difference between how you felt about being searchable in the past and how you feel now. I completely agree that you are never seeing the whole person or story, but it is always hard to remember that. You do a great job at articulating your insight on the idea that you only know yourself, even though we are all still trying to figure ourselves out, and it is interesting to see how you came to this perspective. I especially love how you address the internet directly in your conclusion. Something that may be beneficial to your piece is breaking up some of your sections. For example, you may consider creating subsections in your section "Search Results" to categorize specific searches and results. Your order of information is already great, so just think about how you might split it up more. Because your name is so unique, I would be curious what other people show up in your results of searching your name on social media. Overall, good job! - Morgan Tucker

Rahil Patel Comment

Hey Nell, great job with your writing! I really enjoyed reading your work centered around the fact that the information available about you on the Internet is just a small fraction of the person you are in real life. I especially liked reading about the Search Results section where you detail all of the information that is available on the Internet about you. I too was surprised how much information is so easily accessible by anyone in the world including where you live, what school you go to, and who your friends and family are. One area of your identity statement that I think you could improve is that some parts are slightly repetitive. You kept reminding the reader that the information found online about you was just 1% of who you were. At times, I felt like you over emphasized this point and may have been a little too wordy driving this point home. It is a very relevant and essential piece to your thesis, but I think you can get the point across in a more concise manner. Overall, this was really interesting and I enjoyed reading your work! - Rahil Patel