Talk:Mike Wojan

Mike-

First off, it looks good! It's informative and covers the material necessary. I like that you focus on one aspect (profile picture) and really run it through its paces. Off the bat, I think you could include more of them. You mention a few by description, but as they say, a picture is worth 1000 words. Also, you only assess how truthful the picture is to you in one section, where I was under the impression that it was supposed to be more a focal point of the assignment (I could very well be wrong, so defininty down some salt with this). I did though like the way you put your picture in terms of what you wanted it to mean to friends. Also the secions on truth and cure had some good, thought provoking elements.

As for your writing style, it looked good. There were no grammatical or spelling errors that jumped out at me, which is good. The only thing I'll say is that your writing style/voice, while analytical and descriptive, seemed a little dry. Even though this is a paper for a grade and stuff, I feel like you could have a bit of fun tossed in there. But, it's well written, informative, and interesting, so I wouldn't sweat it too much. Good job!

~DavidB

Hey Mike, You analyzed your profile well and hit all the major points. Your profile biography on the top right is eye-catching and draws the reader in. The overview section is a great introduction and your headings were unique. I would have liked to see more screenshots or specific quotes of posts or status updates. It's interesting that you only focus on the profile picture and the analysis of that aspect was very thorough and complete. I would have liked to see more sections on other parts of Facebook that you use or have observed, perhaps posts or using other applications (ie. Spotify, Instagram). Your "Interpretation" section was right on in terms of social psychology and how people's self-esteem is reinforced by "likes" etc. You talk about how your Facebook persona is different than reality and I think you could have gone into detail with how or how you deviate from the norm of other people's profiles. Again, I would like to see more pictorial examples and just an overall screenshot to how your timeline looks. Great job!

Have a good Thanksgiving!

-Smrithi Dharmarajan